Raised as a fire-ignited vision
I reach the still of tonight
far up there
right above oblivion
I see you kissing my lips
Freed from hefty gravity
I look down at our confusion
far up there
right besides stillness
I see us turning around
_____Adriana Citlali
XXIV-IV-MMXVII
Quadrille #31 –today’s word: still | dVerse.
(A quadrille is a 44-word poem.)
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When space is silence... 
April 24, 2017 at 9:57 pm
Stillness seems to be a position where we can look at our confusion better which is like being able to levitate above it all.
April 24, 2017 at 10:06 pm
I like the idea of escaping our own reality and reaching a peaceful place, even if only within the world of a poem and just for some seconds.
April 24, 2017 at 10:06 pm
An interesting perspective…sometimes good to consider a relationship in silent stillness. The turning around seems hopeful!
April 24, 2017 at 10:12 pm
I like how your poetry manages to keep me wanting more. I have to read it again and again. I don’t know if the end is good or bad. If they turn like in a dance or if they turn and leave each other. The end to me is open to the reader’s interpretation.
April 24, 2017 at 10:40 pm
This is beautiful, Adriana. So glad to see you at dVerse.
April 25, 2017 at 8:35 am
Thank you! 🙂
April 24, 2017 at 10:44 pm
I think that stillness is our reality or at least a part of it. Love the photo that accompanies the poem too.
April 24, 2017 at 10:52 pm
Loved this dusky gem–for me it resonates with meditative OBE, where our spiritual self can survey the scene. Love certainly can be a vehicle for such perspective.
April 25, 2017 at 12:19 am
The title takes me right to that scene in Dirty Dancing, “In the still / of the night …”
April 25, 2017 at 8:15 pm
I have to confess that I have not watched Dirty Dancing, but I will do it to check this scene. 🙂
April 25, 2017 at 1:13 am
The dreamy feel of the sequence has you floating up there looking down on your bodies, kind of existential
April 25, 2017 at 1:18 am
To be beside stillness and witness…a unique perspective ~ I feel the motion in the end ~
Good to have you linking up, smiles ~
April 25, 2017 at 1:49 am
Oooh I absolutely adore this!! Sigh….. so dreamy!!❤️
April 25, 2017 at 2:53 pm
Thanks for such a sweet message. A hug!
April 26, 2017 at 8:07 pm
Hugs!❤️
April 25, 2017 at 3:24 am
I like this point of view, being able to watch stillness. Lovely poem.
April 25, 2017 at 5:52 pm
The motion and the stillness works so well together… it’s like a dance.
April 25, 2017 at 8:06 pm
I like the idea of the vision in stillness–and seeing the movement.