You probably forgot
that late January or February
a year or ten or a century ago
Dream-like memory
a bad one
It’s time to go –You dressed up (for me? maybe)
good-looking coat & hat
That winter coat we bought one summer
purchased never worn before
You knew I liked it
I wondered if you listened
if my words were spoken
Was I confused by chaos imminent change?
Voice & sound remained absent
There was snow on the ground
I knew the truth
we were not together anymore
A night with friends
not-a-date just together somehow
Mixed-up drinks –ours
Bewildering remarks –yours
Silent smiles (forced) puzzle sights (transparent) –mine
Did you reject those words?
Can I retract?
We shared a bed that night
Voiceless dreams dug our hearts –or mine
At dawn no words
__ we knew the truth __ –or I
_____Adriana Citlali
XXI-II-MMXIV
XIII-III-MMXV
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March 13, 2015 at 2:10 am
Love is a magical thing..
and separation from
love is not a thing..
for magic to sing
the art
of song
in heart
for those who love..:)
March 13, 2015 at 2:12 am
by the way.. best song ever for
that..:)
March 28, 2015 at 11:24 pm
Thanks for sharing this song. It is really good and goes well with the theme of this poem.
March 13, 2015 at 2:15 am
That’s a sad and bitter ending ~ But when its time to go, best to let things go ~ Who knows, what will come next, maybe better than the last one ~ Thanks for linking up ~
March 13, 2015 at 2:24 am
sorrow is something we learn – we can never understand it until we live it. I felt this poem was delicate, intricate – like people who know but cannot say. Very nice
March 13, 2015 at 4:09 am
You know it’s the end but the impact doesn’t lessen. Bitterness here but not ugly. This is what I call a “weaving” poem, my own term. The past, the present all together but coming out the same at the end, sadness.
March 13, 2015 at 5:29 am
The past creeping up – a visitor in the meeting, but trying as we may it’s an absent future that we have. Some relationships are like that..
March 13, 2015 at 7:28 am
I love the jarring pace of this piece. Simple in wordage but such a loaded theme of complexity. You are a poetic force to be reckoned with.
March 13, 2015 at 11:49 am
Honestly this is my favorite of all the poems I have read for Open Link so far — in the way you have set the stage, the way you have written it, the way you go back and forth with the ‘his’ and ‘yours’ and the way it ends with a real gut punch. I can tell that you really worked this poem, and the work paid off. Brilliant!
March 28, 2015 at 11:26 pm
Thank you, Mary. I guess I need to thank the poetry gods that visited me the night I wrote this poem…. 🙂
March 13, 2015 at 12:44 pm
I totally agree with Mary. This is an excellent poem!
March 13, 2015 at 8:20 pm
A pensive moment well narrated with rich and intimate details. Loved it. Thanks for joining on OLN.
March 27, 2015 at 4:13 pm
oh heck.. that is so sad – and excellently written… powerful work with making the emotions so palpable
March 27, 2015 at 4:22 pm
Thanks, Clau.