conundrum
Amelia feels the jar of a heartbeat
wrapped around unspoken words
hesitation
The phone is ringing
A turmoil of fears clutter her thoughts
exposure
Amelia answers
Words are spoken
entropy
Amelia releases a secret
Possibilities scatter around
peace
Amelia feels the enchantment of freedom
_____Adriana Citlali
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Time for a Quadrille at dVerse: a 44-word poem that has to include today’s word jar.
Source: Quadrille #13 | dVerse
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August 15, 2016 at 10:13 pm
I wonder what was the secret that lifted the chains off her heart. 🙂 But speaking the heart at times does seem freeing. I liked the turmoil in the story.
August 15, 2016 at 10:21 pm
Love this. I feel as though I am pulling fantastic words from a jar, and searching for their true meaning. Just wonderful.
August 15, 2016 at 10:43 pm
Thank you! You just gave me a great idea of how to add a visual to this poem. I will do some drawing…
August 15, 2016 at 10:36 pm
You captured the tension of the uncertain. it made me glad when you found relief at last
August 15, 2016 at 11:12 pm
Jar of a heartbeat…I love this line as well as the freedom in the end!
August 15, 2016 at 11:20 pm
I love this!
August 16, 2016 at 12:39 am
You really build up the suspense up until the last line. Well done.
August 16, 2016 at 4:17 am
I love the shades of meaning of your opening line, Adriana.
August 16, 2016 at 4:35 am
Oh that tension until the secret’s spilled… Jar of heartbeat, I could feel that…
August 16, 2016 at 5:37 am
I can feel that jarred heartbeat when the phone rang…and then the release of tension as the secret spilled. Well done!
August 16, 2016 at 11:54 am
Oh, intriguing. You made us want to hear moreeee.
August 16, 2016 at 12:54 pm
Beautifully haunting!! ❤
August 16, 2016 at 1:22 pm
You seem to have pulled us into the heat of a story. I love the form that you used.
August 16, 2016 at 6:04 pm
Oh this is wonderful..as you take us through each step from conundrum to resolve.
August 16, 2016 at 6:35 pm
I really like how you wrote this, word by word with the lines underneath. Fear, secrets, release….wonderful!
August 16, 2016 at 7:21 pm
I want to know more! I loved the progression in this.
August 17, 2016 at 6:39 am
Beautifully structured. You tell us everything, and yet keep the secret.
August 19, 2016 at 5:21 am
There is a release in the right kind of telling.
I like the structure of this poem. Well done.
August 20, 2016 at 1:25 pm
I’m glad you brought it to that positive conclusion. 🙂