When space is silence…

Words, sounds, and space…

Take me further


Push those clouds     a  w  a  y     . . .

Kick  them!         Far!                     far     a  w  a  y   

Take  me                                            f  u  r  t  h  e  r

                              S  c  e  n  t      m  y      s  k  y     w  i  t  h

                                                   golden sunflowers

                          glowing honey                             velvety warmth

                 cinnamon ray-paths                                     freshly-cut dawn

                           smooth dewdrops                            cacao  hints

                                     a first love kiss    &   ephemeral youth

                              E  n  h  a  n  c  e      m  y      s  e  n  s  e   s

                              L  o  s  e      c   o  n t  r  o  l 

                              F  r  e  e       m  e


_____Adriana Citlali

Author: Adriana Citlali Ramírez

A citizen of the world, born in Mexico city... A physicist (working as a geophysicist) and a part-time artist (creative writing, oil/acrylic painting, photography)… All posts, visual art, and poems ©Adriana Citlali Ramírez. All rights reserved.

26 thoughts on “Take me further

  1. Adriana! A tremendos poem! “Enhence my senses” Love it!

  2. A sensual wonder this piece is, full of imaginative combinations ( i.e./freshly cut dawn/), fun to read, & i enjoyed chasing the words around the page as they formed interesting shapes. You rocked the prompt & salved my need for finding creativity out here on the dVerse trail.

  3. Well..
    i don’t often
    provide compliments
    directly.. but this one
    is by far the best i come
    across today.. keeping in
    mind i come across them
    all year long every one..
    you knocked it out of
    of human Freedom
    here.. the smell
    that lives

  4. Scent my sky with golden sunflowers… Your poem does just that. Simply beautiful!

  5. I love all those scents… I can imagine them now specially when its cold and icy outside ~ Thanks for joining us and wishing you Happy New Year !

  6. Your words are lovely and we are all different but for me the ‘art display’ of the words distracts and diminishes.

  7. What a lovely, scent-infused poem. You brought it all to life in your dramatic and fun write.
    Gayle ~

  8. This is just wonderful… all those scents, so soft and vivid… I can almost imagine the scents have color. I would love to hear this read.

  9. I agree 😀 this is absolutely amazing 😀

  10. Love the creative formatting on this. It really did take me up, up, and away! Peace, Linda

  11. Such a free mind full of joy…..very creative!

  12. Your poem is so full of light and lift along with scent for me! So pretty!

  13. As I scroll down I see many have comment on the use of scent in this and that’s exactly what smacked me…beautifully done.

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