Amelia runs through the labyrinth inside the secret room 1101 behind her eyelids, where memories are allowed, desires are contained, possibilities forbidden.
Perplexity all over.
The threat:
Three bewildered cats danced around Amelia
The range:
Close encounter within a confined space
The place:
Not here, not there –not anymore
The match:
Forbidden realm
The cost:
Repression
_____Adriana Citlali
XXVI-II-MMXVI
IX-V-MMXVI
“But the beauty is in the walking — we are betrayed by destinations.”
― Gwyn Thomas
It is Haibun Monday #13 at dVerse, and the theme is walking.
Strictly speaking, this is not a haibun. It’s structure has been inspired by that of haibuns.
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May 9, 2016 at 7:40 pm
This raises all kinds of question, Adriana–just who is Amelia and what, exactly is room 1101 all about. I wonder if this could be written to fit the haibun form.
May 9, 2016 at 7:52 pm
Amelia is a recurring character in my poetry. I’ve wrote plenty about her. She gets to experience all kinds of events that never happened to me and some that did. Room 1101 is related to room 101 from Orwell’s 1984.
As for the structure, yes, maybe it can be turned into a haibun, but I do not edit my poems after I publish them. I guess I will have to write a real haibun soon. 🙂
May 9, 2016 at 7:58 pm
I think this could easily be written to the haibun form. I love the dancing cats.
May 9, 2016 at 8:04 pm
Indeed, it is perplexity all over.
To me it reads as an affair or a forbidden passion that can be remembered but not spoeken about.
May 9, 2016 at 8:05 pm
Ah.. not quite a haibun.. but it’s a walking for sure…Your Amalia Persona is of course someone I know. The possibilities forbidden are so chilling… I sincerely hope it’s just a dream…
May 9, 2016 at 11:02 pm
I never thought of giving that secret room a number or a name…very creative
May 10, 2016 at 12:24 am
This reads like being lost in the nightmare ~ Chilling read ~
May 10, 2016 at 6:54 am
‘possibilities forbidden’ sends down some chill…
May 10, 2016 at 9:15 am
This has its dark side and I love the layout and the threat!
May 10, 2016 at 1:56 pm
Clever to create a character that appears throughout your poetry….a bit “novelistic!”
You definitely should try the haibun style — I think your Amelia would quite enjoy the experience.
Hope to see you at the bar this afternoon — I’ll be tending and would love to have you and Amelia join us again.
May 15, 2016 at 5:50 pm
Thank you, Lillian. I would have loved to join your prompt, but life did not allow me this time.
May 15, 2016 at 10:41 pm
“door” is always open 🙂
May 10, 2016 at 3:59 pm
I like the diminishing nature of this, the way it funnels down into itself.
May 13, 2016 at 4:49 am
This leaves me wanting more….perhaps a sequel haibun. Amelia sounds like a very intriguing character.
May 13, 2016 at 1:38 pm
Thank you! Amelia is intriguing… Maybe she will have a haibun next Monday.
May 15, 2016 at 7:57 am
Most intriguing.