When space is silence…

Words, sounds, and space…

Beat #2

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I observe. Your dreamy lips move endlessly.
Words disintegrate –only silence reaches my ears.
I shall leave.

 

_____Adriana Citlali
XIII-II-MMXVI

I call this form a Beat Poem: a sharp, though-provoking description of a unique thought/moment in 3 verses of 7-7-3 words.

Author: Adriana Citlali Ramírez

A citizen of the world, born in Mexico city... A physicist (working as a geophysicist) and a part-time artist (creative writing, oil/acrylic painting, photography)… All posts, visual art, and poems ©Adriana Citlali Ramírez. All rights reserved.

5 thoughts on “Beat #2”

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  1. Ilya
    February 13, 2016 at 9:01 pm

    Sharp and perfect, Adri!
    It makes me think of a person pouring their heart to you, while you are trying to leave them without hurting them much, maybe.

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  2. Marsha
    February 13, 2016 at 9:42 pm

    I can feel the doubt, maybe the wish not to disappoint.

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  3. Victoria C. Slotto
    February 14, 2016 at 2:36 am

    Strong and pointed. I like the idea of a beat poem.

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  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    February 20, 2016 at 10:56 pm

    I really like the idea… poems should bite with beat… but I feel a separation of the night.. we are like ships on the ocean sometimes.

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