When space is silence…

Words, sounds, and space…

Amelia wrote a list

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How?   

Video   He   Guitar   Pink Floyd   –archive
Tattoo   He   Phone   Pills   –attenuate
Photo   She   Mirror   Voices   –fade away

Wish?

Rose   He   Candles   Breakfast kiss   –frame
Wine   He   Passion   Midsummer indulgence   –preserve
Sculpture   She   Wings   Twilight ephemerality   –save

You?

You   He   Face   Man   –contemplate
He?   You?   Ghost   Others   –observe
Amelia   She   Reflection   Path   –embrace

Here?

Possibility   Instant   Expectation   Dream    — …


_____Adriana Citlali
XXIV-X-MMXIV

Meeting the Bar ~ I’ve Got a Little List | dVerse.


 

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Author: Adriana Citlali Ramírez

A citizen of the world, born in Mexico city... A physicist (working as a geophysicist) and a part-time artist (creative writing, oil/acrylic painting, photography)… All posts and poems ©Adriana Citlali Ramírez. All rights reserved.

16 thoughts on “Amelia wrote a list

  1. fascinating…what an interesting structure you came up with for this…
    ther eis a hint of a story but so much left up to the reader to read into this…
    very cool…

  2. I like the formatting of the list words ~ It looks like a word puzzle, filed with possibilities ~

  3. What a wonder to try to fill the gaps.. An experiment that works for me… Good for Amalia – I hope it plays out well.

  4. This is different, and very very interesting.

  5. That’s definitely a twist on the list-poem I’ve not come across before. As Brian says, it hints at an underlying story – maybe several stories – but leaves a lot of room for the reader to fill in the details.

    I think you should keep experimenting with this; it has great potential.

  6. I agree…starting with this list of word that reference a whole other story..good compilation of associations here.

  7. how i wish – how i wish you were here… smiles… i will have an earworm for the rest of the day – smiles
    very cool list

    • A piece of the puzzle has been solved! “Wish you were here” is the connection with He and Pink Floyd. Is he in the video or playing this song in the guitar? Or is he an observer?
      This opens more questions: Is he the same as the second he? Is you he? Is she Amelia?
      I have a theory but it doesn’t matter. Your poem makes me think and imagine scenarios.

  8. a new form can start from here…it has great possibilities….comments above have helped me to explore….

  9. Groovy piece. The form was lovely.

  10. Interesting form you use here – like discrete pieces but you weave them together as a whole as well, Nice effect that one.

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