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Down with a cold

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Amelia follows the cat, stumbles upon a wall, loses control,
falls down that path, finds a mirror.        

Usual symptoms:
  headache
  congested nose
  sore throat
  watery eyes
  occasional fever

Amelia texts a “hello”, looks for the cat, sits on this bench,
waits for the answer: no answer.

Possible causes:
  heartache
  congested mind
  sore memories
  watery eyes
  unknown fear

Amelia reflects a reflection, looks at the path, thinks of the cat.


_____Adriana Citlali
XXVI-II-MMXIV


 

OpenLinkNight ~ February 2014 | dVerse.

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Author: Adriana Citlali Ramírez

A citizen of the world, born in Mexico city... A physicist (working as a geophysicist) and a part-time artist (creative writing, oil/acrylic painting, photography)… All posts and poems ©Adriana Citlali Ramírez. All rights reserved.

12 thoughts on “Down with a cold

  1. love the form of this…how the second stanza echoes, but changes the first.

  2. oh a heartache is much more serious than a headache or a cold…if the soul is suffering, the whole body does..

  3. i am guessing heartache…cause she feels a bit lost in the world…
    and def much worse than a headache or cold…

  4. I am thinking the cat is in a box and Amelia does not know if it is alive or dead, and maybe it is not time to find out… TE QUIERO!

    • You really made me laugh! I was not writing about Schrödinger’s cat, though. At least, not to my knowledge, but it is an independent piece now that it is out; as such, it is subject to the reader’s interpretation…. ¡Yo también te quiero!

  5. I enjoyed your use of contrasts and the possibilities they offered in our understanding of your poem!

  6. How the subtle changes between your love changes the story … and turns it into a story of loss… very very sad poem in reality.

  7. This was like a mystery ~ I like how the refrain changes with the scene ~

  8. two different sides ~ joined together, a sadness in the knowledge that there was no answer. The symptoms far worse in the 2nd stanza ~ nice linking.

  9. What an interesting style and form…I enjoyed this immensely, especially the enigmatic last line.
    Thanks so much for stopping by my blog earlier with your uplifting comment about twilight…I’m inclined to think of her in a kind light also…

    http://seingrahamsays.wordpress.com/2014/02/25/twilights-lament/

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